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 * From: || [|Richard Tucker]  || Sent: || Thu 16/12/2010 13:15 ||
 * To: || [|Eric Ramaz]
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 * Subject: || BAPD feedback ||


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 * || Hi Eric,

This assignment is divided into 4 sections so I'll structure my feedback in that manner too.

1. Personal context. To save words, I'd suggest you shorten this, deleting all after the statement about the evolution of your role to include health and well-being promotion. Everything up to that point seems fine.

2. Reflective practice. I suggest you remove pretty much all of pages 3 and 4, i.e. your tree model. This section is possibly the most important of the whole thing and wants to concentrate on a critique of other people's thoughts on reflection with mention of how it applies to your own circumstances rather than a long description of your own thoughts. You begin to do this at the bottom of page 4 and what follows is more like what you need here. (It needs to be moved around so that the discussion flows better from start to finish but what you already have will form a good basis for that.) At the bottom of page 7 you move on to motivation (Race and then Greenaway) and I think you should remove all of that too: you don't have enough words to discuss it in sufficient depth here.

Part 3. Professional issues. This is written in the task description as a plural, but in the criteria it is singular ('some aspect'). I think you would be better to cut this down to at most two issues, removing the economic considerations you mention. What you need here is more critical analysis, which in part comes down to finding references to back up your discussion. Your first and third points lend themselves better to this, I think.

Part 4. Development plan. This looks fine, although it would need amending if you make changes to parts 2 and 3 above.

The assignment description is sitting on my desk if you want to pick it up sometime before I get round to bringing it over.

Richard || ||